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Boots
 
December 7th, 2004  
C/2nd Lt Robot
 
 

Topic: New poem


Just wondering what you guys/gals thought about my poem i wrote not to long ago.

And when I leave for a far off land
Do not cry for me
For I shall return
This is the life I chose
This is the life I accepted
When I return we shall be together
As a whole, like we were
You’re my reason to survive
You’re my reason to fight
For the freedoms we so greatly enjoy
The look in your eye gives me strength
To overcome any obstacle in my path
Which will lead me back to you
When I return we shall dance
Dance the night away
We will be together
Together as a whole
Like we used to be
The life I chose is not easy
But I crave it anyway

Copyright 2004, Nulli Secundus, all rights reserved
December 8th, 2004  
C/2nd Lt Robot
 
 
well, I thought it was good. Just to let you know; I used a lot of symbolism. So it's probably not what you think i'm talking about.
December 8th, 2004  
mandi
 
i really liked it, it seems like you have a real talent there
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Boots
December 8th, 2004  
Trevor
 
Very good. You could be the next John McCrae or John G. Magee.
December 9th, 2004  
C/2nd Lt Robot
 
 
If you ever see a book entitled "Labours Of Love" it should be somewhere in there. If i'm not mistakes it comes out sometime in January.
December 9th, 2004  
LIPS
 
 
I liked it. Well done.
December 9th, 2004  
EagleZtrike
 
 
Pretty good poem. Should think about being a poet?
December 9th, 2004  
A Can of Man
 
 
That's a nice job.
But I don't really know if poems and this subject really mix.
It's always seemed like a "shut up and do it," sort of thing.