Please comment on my poem

Wow They Broke Up Like 2 Weeks Ago And No1 Told Me!!!!! so i wrote her this last night.

I really like you
i hope you feel the same
i've always had feelings for you
ever since i knew your name
i want you to know something
and i hope you say yes
because being with you
makes me feel blessed
i hope you feel what i feel
i hope you see what i see
because this question im about to ask is
Will - You - Go - Out - With - Me?

wutcha think of that one
 
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I think thats much better.
At only 14 (im assuming shes of similar age) she wont want promises of endless love only to know you're interested.
Try it, if she responds all well and good if not forget it if you cant catch her attention on the rebound romance is not going to happen, don't beat yourself up about it theres plenty more fish in the sea.
Good luck mate
I hope you score.
Can't even remember what I was like at 14.
 
I remember being ornery and ethical- and having a liking for work and not much else. Maybe that's why my neighbors see me rolling down the street with a machete and axe strapped to the handlebars of my bicylce on my way to the barn.

Seriously, I would worry more about school and extracurricular work than women right now, take it from someone who was 14 once- and glad not to be that age again.
 
"there was a girl AC* fancied called Jo*
and he wrote her poems for show
but she liked another
so she said "brother,
how many times do i have to say no"

sorry dude couldn't resist!!

talk, not text will do the trick


*Names have been changed to protect the randy!!
 
armlesscadet said:
Wow They Broke Up Like 2 Weeks Ago And No1 Told Me!!!!! so i wrote her this last night.

I really like you
i hope you feel the same
i've always had feelings for you
ever since i knew your name
i want you to know something
and i hope you say yes
because being with you
makes me feel blessed
i hope you feel what i feel
i hope you see what i see
because this question im about to ask is
Will - You - Go - Out - With - Me?

wutcha think of that one

Well.. All I can say is: Go for it!! Just because these guys don't think it's a good idea doesn't mean that it is. The problem is, in my opinion, that guys doesn't do these things. I don't know why they are sitting around waiting and doing nothing.. Cease the moment! Hell, I wish I had a man who could send me poems like this.. As I said; where did the romantic parts in life go?

Dougal: Well, where is your poems then? I would gladly read them!
 
armlesscadet said:
well i asked her out earlier and SHE SAID YES!!!!!

GO YOU!!! :bravo:

We women know stuff like this.. So ask the superior gender. :whip:

Ha ha.. ;)

(J/k)
 
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