Military poem




 
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October 27th, 2004  
Damien
 

Topic: Military poem


I'm not sure if this is where to post this, and sorry if it isn't...

It's a poem I wrote today out of boredom...

Why am I here?

As I lay here tonight,
I wait for the light.
I think of our fate,
Surrounded by hate.
Why am I here?
Tomorrow I ship home,
Tonight I feel so alone.
My warm heart starts to race,
I miss the look of your beautiful face.
Why am I here?
The base alarm starts blaring,
My bunk-mate runs out swearing.
I reach out for my only gun,
These fights really are no fun.
Why am I here?
The tracers seem to hover,
As I leap for a piece of cover.
Soon a lot less gunfire sounds,
Many good men dead on the ground.
Why am I here?
I hear grown men crying
from the pains of dying.
Must get home alive
to our little son of five.
Why am I here?
I feel a sharp pain in my chest.
A severed artery at the best.
As I'm drained of life,
I think my dying thought,
how much freedom for my wife,
Has this sacrifice bought?
That's why I'm here.
October 27th, 2004  
AFSteliga
 
 
Wow....that's impressive.
October 27th, 2004  
Damien
 
thankyamuch

the rhyming scheme confuses me a little even, I'm gonna try to revise it and I'll repost it...

I might enter the poem into my school's poetry slam later this year.
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October 27th, 2004  
Redleg
 
 
Nice one!
December 9th, 2004  
jrotcwmckinnon
 
 
Very,nice one dude you rock! Rock On! 8)
December 29th, 2004  
Peper
 
 
That is awesome. You did an excellant job!!
December 30th, 2004  
Damien
 
Thank you.
January 2nd, 2005  
C/2nd Lt Robot
 
 
Rhyming doesn't matter when it comes to poetry. I've found that it's a lot easier to write poems when you don't have to worry about rhyming. You should post it at www.poetry.com. A few of mine are there. If you're lucky you may just get a few published. My latest poem is going to be published sometime soon in Labors of Love, I believe is its title.
January 6th, 2005  
Damien
 
I showed this poem to my Language Arts/Creative Writing teacher and she hugged me and said it's beautiful, that it reminds her of her step-son that just got back from 2 tours of duty.
January 14th, 2005  
doomshot
 
 
Beatiful! THat Poem is great. Wish I could write like that