Hi y'all. I need a hand from you guys. Actually, a friend of mine, former member of the boards (actually, still a member but not active poster for a while), an American lady, has had a hard life and things have really been harsh for her. Big bad family, financial, health problems and she's alone. She is on the edge of a nervous breakdown right now but since she is attending college she desperately needs to get some essays finished within eight days. She is taking pills and is not in good conditions to be frank.
I thought we can help her out with some of these essays, especially as one is about Viet Nam and the other about Bin Laden. I am sure we have some good folks in here who, by first-hand experience or school/books, can contribute with even just a couple of lines, or a thought. Every contribute can be helpful. She will read what we say and gather fruitful ideas for her essays. She needs that. I believe any help on the internet is welcome, like useful links etc.

The first one- she's got to write the review for a book that she has chosen: "Through Our Enemies' Eyes by Anonymous Brasseys Inc, 2002". Though she thinks the guy is no longer anonymous.
Has anyone read that? This is how standard reviews should be done.

The second one- Title: Removed by IG for privacy issues.

I'm sure we can do our best on this one. Here is what she has done so far: (next post as there's not enough room in here).

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What do you think? Do you agree? I thank those of you who will contribute with your opinion. I'll take it as a personal favor. Thank you.

I'll go over it and get it back to you. I haven't read the book but I will take care of grammar and clarity and anything that sounds really off the reservation.

What is her exact deadline bruv?

Originally Posted by bulldogg

I'll go over it and get it back to you. I haven't read the book but I will take care of grammar and clarity and anything that sounds really off the reservation.

What is her exact deadline bruv?

You're a great friend buddy. Deadline is May 8th.

Her agenda is showing.

There are some points where she makes claims with no supporting evidence like the claim that the My Lai massacre was a result of soldiers feeling isolated. It doesn't follow so she needs to rework that or back it up with some source.

Done. Check your email.

Ok right, I'll check email now.Thanks.

The great man named Bulldog, who is also a teacher, brought about a lot of corrections to the paper.
Here is his corrected version:

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My personal thoughts on one of her claims that is subjective and therefore not disproven by fact is in the second to last paragraph where she says "From this isolation soldiers supposedly went AWOL and became blood-thirsty killing machines." This is extremely inflammatory language.

In my opinion it would be better to say "From this isolation it is claimed soldiers went AWOL and some even lost their sense of right and wrong."

Anybody else? I am hoping for Top to weigh in on this as I can take care of grammar and clarity but for content... I wasn't there and didn't live through it so it would be very presumptious of me to spout off.